In just over a month, I head to the Ontario Writers’ Conference to mingle with writers, publishers, agents and editors. I’m also delivering a workshop on dialogue, specifically on dialect and diversity in dialogue.
It took me many years to become comfortable using dialogue. My early characters spent a lot of time in their heads thinking about what was going on. In their heads, they voiced concerns, got angry, wanted to ask about stuff. The reader knew all this, [if they were still awake at this point] but the other characters in the story didn’t. Eventually, I realized my characters needed to react and interact— out loud!
But just saying everything out loud is not the whole story. Dialogue scenes are powerful. Dialogue is one of the best ways to engage the reader. Even if characters are sitting still, a dialogue scene works as an action scene and propels the story forward. And it can do so much more—even several things at once—like reveal character, advance the plot, create mood, build conflict, reveal backstory or support the theme.
“Writing good dialogue is art as well as craft,” says Stephen King. Here are 5 tips for writing good dialogue scenes:
Know why you are writing the scene
Dialogue is not filler—or shouldn’t be. If your characters are just discussing the weather or what they want for dinner, your readers’ eyes will glaze over. Kind of the same way I skip over all the pictures of people’s dinners on Facebook. Will the scene reveal or hint at some backstory, or let the reader see how the relationship is developing, or give information about the plot.
“You wouldn’t say that if you had known my mother.” (Hint at back story? Reveal character?)
“Mike said it was just over the hill, an old factory where they processed paint or something.” Relaying information BUT it must be new to the reader AND to the character being spoken to.
Make dialogue do double duty
Once you’ve decided what the main purpose of the dialogue scene is, see what else you can make it do at the same time.
“You wouldn’t say that if you had known my mother. She was a right ball breaker. Besides, she had a stash of these things up at the old farmhouse in Williamstown.” (hint at back story PLUS info for the plot?)
“I’ll never step foot in that woman’s house.” (Opinion of another character? Showing anger and resistance? Plot problem?…all three?)
Anchor the scene
It’s okay to dive into the scene right in the conversation, but if you start a chapter with dialogue make sure it’s not “floating”. Readers need to know who is talking and where they are, and what point this is in the story. If you don’t, the reader will find it hard to absorb the dialogue nuances or subtext because they will be too busy trying to get oriented. I’m not suggesting a long piece of exposition here. Set it up in the chapter before, use a name in the spoken dialogue, or add a beat of setting.
Floating: “I can pick you up around seven. At the diner okay?”
Anchored: When Leah reached the motel, she rescued her cell from the clothes on the backseat. “Amber, I can pick you up around seven. At the diner okay?”
Show emotions
Always be aware of the emotions being felt by the characters speaking and convey that in word choice and body language, not exclamation points or adverbs tacked onto the end.
Adverbs and punctuation: “I will NOT GO!!!” said Lily defiantly.
Beats and word choice: Lily crossed her arms and stared from under smoldering eyebrows. “A team of horses couldn’t drag me to that place.”
Never use dialogue as an “info dump”
My critique circle calls this an as-you-know-Bob moment. Characters should only talk about the things that are important to them at that point in the story, that fit with their emotions at the time, and that they would ordinarily say in real life to another person.
As-you-know-Bob moment: “We’ll go to Mike’s place, near your Mom’s house, and give 
him the book you’re holding.” (The listening character knows where Mike’s place is and knows who is holding the book. No emotional content here.)
Real words: “Ok, Ok. We’ll go to Mike’s place, already. Give him your bloody book.”
Spending time on dialogue is well worth the effort. It dramatizes your story helping readers feel like they are actually listening in.
Do you have any dialogue tips to share? Post in the comments below.
If you want to explore dialogue further, here are some other blogs you might find interesting. .and useful.
Keep it Simple: Keys to Realistic Dialogue Part 1
Keep it Simple: keys to Realistic Dialogue Part 2
On Writing – Dialogue – Robert J Sawyer
9 Easily Preventable Mistakes Writers make with Dialogue
